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14 March 2004 @ 09:23 pm
i finally squeezed out the rest of my play. mind you, i have many a revision in mind. the beginning is going to go through a near-total rewrite, and of course, this ending needs some serious polishing. but that's why i need comments, if you have any.

this is mostly a draft outlining what i want to happen and why it's happening. the actual writing needs work. but so do my other four classes, and i have to go focus on those for the time being. remind me never to take 20 credits again.

anyway, here is the ending to Bemused. It starts where this part leaves off.

i don't really have any specific questions at this point. just general comments on what needs to go and what needs to stay, or even suggestions of anything to add in, so i can get cracking on the revision process.

thank you for reading. i really appreciate it. ^_^


approximate page length: 9 (with lots of spaces between lines, remember!)Collapse )
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Mood:: draineddrained
 
 
13 March 2004 @ 06:09 pm
check out my groovy new icon! stolen from neopets. it just cracks me up. anyway:

this was a fun assignment. i had a list of "rules," like not screaming, not crying, not spontaneously expressing love, not describing death in detail, etc. my setting was five people at a dinner table. i had to set a timer for six minutes and write normal conversation. after the alarm went off, i had to have one of the characters break one of the rules for two minutes. then back to normal conversation. the number of minutes kept getting shorter and shorter throughout the assignment.

does that make any sense? well, here it is.

thank you for reading! ^_^

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06 March 2004 @ 03:44 pm
more of the muse play. it's still not finished. here is the beginning.
still in first-draft mode. needs revision badly. help.

oh, and i'm not going through and putting the center tag on all the names again. it took forever. so...just pretend that the names are centered. ^_^;

thank you for reading.

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03 March 2004 @ 01:45 am
i already turned this one in, so there's no real urgency, but i'd like some feedback in case i pick this one for my "extended story" i have to do for my final.

the assignment was to have two people, with high-stake secrets from each other. one or both of the secrets must be revealed at the end, and there must be a power shift because of this.

i'm not too fond of this story, by the way.

the title is from a counting crows song.

questions:
did i fulfill the assignment? (not for assignment's sake, but rather, did i reach my goal?)
the capitalization was an experiment. did it fail or succeed? do you see what i'm trying to do with it? or is it just distracting?
any suggestions or comments?

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questions i have:

is it going someplace?
is it getting repetitive?
are the characters distinct?
is it funny?
any suggestions or comments?

note: this will actually be performed. i only have nine women, so the lines with the man will prolly be cut.

EDIT: by the way, this is not the whole play. i got about 20 more pages to go. this is just what i have so far.

working title: Bemused. approx. page length: 10 (but it's a play, so there's lots of spaces between lines)Collapse )

thanks for reading
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01 March 2004 @ 08:23 pm
content coming soon.
 
 
Mood:: creativehuzzah!